Hi I am going to show you my writing of Umbrella. This is a short film about empathy. It is a story about a boy in an orphanage and a young girl. I hope you like it.
Umbrella
Just before darkness fell, the door to Miss Elem’s Home For Children opened wide. The girl with the sunflower yellow umbrella nervously entered the orphanage before finding a home for her umbrella. not wanting to be seen, Jacob zoomed his head around the door frame so that he was hidden from view. Standing off to the side the girl scanned the joyful scene as the children searched in the box for hidden treasures.The girl smiled as she watched the young boy racing around like a floating sheep. Her smile slowly vanished as she looked back at the umbrella stand and all she saw were puddles. Her favourite umbrella had disappeared.
can you find a simile in my writing ?
Great work Ollie
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